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I killed you zombies >:) im the best.

Discussion in 'MC-WarZ' started by DiverXe, Feb 15, 2014.

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  1. DiverXe

    DiverXe Well-Known Member

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    I would like to post a poem again. I posted 2 in the literary section.
    Sorry for posting on this mcwarz section. Reason why i wanna post this, because everyone look at it more than literary.
    Here we go !

    Silly Zombie chasing me.
    Silly Zombie Cant you see?
    I've got a gun fully-loaded
    and some bombs, unexploded.
    I've got to go and set your trap
    so you can take a true dirt nap.
    I love to shoot you so so much
    or beat you to death with a crutch.
    Silly Zombie say good-bye.
    Silly Zombie you just died.

    This was a short poem .. But in my opinion it is still good :smile:

    Hope you enjoy.

    Also just move it to literary section.
    After few days.
     
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  2. GreenPeas

    GreenPeas The man, the myth, the meme

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    Do try to post things in the correct forum, it helps us with stuff such as we can find more important threads, in the Discussion forums, easier, if we need to.
    On terms of your poem, great start to it, seems to deteriorate abit when it gets to:
    Perhaps some changes could be made to that part.
    Apart from that, nice work.
     
    #2 GreenPeas, Feb 15, 2014
  3. DiverXe

    DiverXe Well-Known Member

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    Thank you and from now i will post on the literary section :smile:
     
    #3 DiverXe, Feb 15, 2014
  4. teawithchoco

    teawithchoco Well-Known Member

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    Short but nice :V
     
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  5. GreenPeas

    GreenPeas The man, the myth, the meme

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    Thank you.
     
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  6. DiverXe

    DiverXe Well-Known Member

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    No problem
     
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  7. Verasium

    Verasium Well-Known Member

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    It's an okay poem. It gets rather weak where Green mentioned. Also, as Green said, post in the right sections from now on. Even though, we love your poems, we'll need you to allow them to "breathe" because here it'll drown from the other threads piling up.
     
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  8. DiverXe

    DiverXe Well-Known Member

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    :smile: ty
     
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