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Story Saving the ones you love (part 1)

Discussion in 'Literature' started by Nxy, Mar 18, 2015.

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  1. Nxy

    Nxy Just another birb

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    My vision wavers, opening my eyes. I look around at my surroundings. It's an empty place, and my head hurts. Groaning I sit up and wince in pain. Looking over, I find glass shattered around me, the pinks, blues, greens and yellows, sparkling in the cool evening sunset. and blood. My wrist throbs, and I can't tell what the damage is.
    I don't remember this. I don't remember any of this, I think. Why don't I remember? Frantically I look around. "Klaus?" I call. The wind was my only answer. standing up, pain shoots through my left leg. I didn't care, and I don't remember.
    "Ahh, My dear Laurel, You're not ready to stand up." Raising his hand, he gestures to the floor. Grasping, my wrist, and maybe saying a few words my mother told me never to use, I turned around. "Who are you?" I say with all the sarcasm I could conjurer out of the top of my head. "Sit." Orders the man. "Never," I remarked. "I said sit" Yells the man. "Look at you, you can barely stand, nevertheless walk. Now Sit." I slid to the floor, still keeping my eyes on him. "What the hell did you do to my memory," I say through gritted teeth. "And why am I here?" "Where is Klaus?" I start firing the questions. Giving me an annoyed glance, "Shut up!" He yells. "Man you're annoying." he says, now getting up from the chair he was sitting on from across the building.
    Looking around, I could tell this building was old, along with a past, never for my interest to discover. Taking a closer look, I could tell this was a church. All of the glass stained windows were broken, the shattered pieces lying on the hard stone floor.
    "Your cute when your injured," he says chuckling. "Shut up," I moan. "If I wasn't you'd be dead by now. Just leave me alone and let me bleed to death," I say lying down again closing my eyes. "Very rude of you, ms. Laurel" he says sitting down next to me. "Oh goodie! You know my name and you've said it like twice now, But I'm sorry I wasn't paying attention to a word you said. You deserve a sticker." Laughing now, he says: "you really are quite the sarcastic one, but you look at me as if I'm the bad guy." "Are you going to let me go?" I ask. "No." he replies. "Well then, my point proven". "Look. I'm here to protect you," he insists. "I can protect myself thank you" I say getting up. Groaning, I stammer to my feet. Looking around, he whispers, "You would just leave? You would leave Klaus? You would leave your entire future to save yourself? Because I know exactly where he is. And we can save him. All I ask is that you trust me".

    " No. Liar" I snap. "You don't know who Klaus is, nor do you know any of my plans. and I remain to keep it that way as well." Giving me a dirty look, he replies "Well, What I do know is that your mother Jenna was killed last night. Your brother Danny, was nearly burned to death 2 weeks ago, and Klaus was taken from his home. Right after he left your place looking for you, nearly three weeks ago." he said, spitting out the words as if they were poison. "No. Jenna can't be dead. You're lying! I've only been what, knocked out for a couple of hours? At least? and I still have no idea where I am, No way it's been three weeks. It's not possible." "I'm telling the truth, Laurel. Don't you remember? they tried getting you too. I saved you. when they cornered you here? They nearly killed you! Tell me you remember." Rolling my eyes I remarked, "I don't remember anything... all I remember was waking up to my still bleeding calf and wrist, by the way. And dose it hurt like hell." "Sorry," he mumbled. "Wait," I say. " I just noticed you said they. Who's they?"

    " They are your best friends Duncan, James and Destiny. And they want to kill you."

    End of part 1
     
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  2. PumkinLp

    PumkinLp Well-Known Member

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    im not a fan from storys and it bores me to read because my brain has to translate it to german xD so sry that im bot reading it
     
  3. MortalJE

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    Pretty nice little story Ashley. I’m actually really interested in readying part 2. :grinning:
     
  4. Nxy

    Nxy Just another birb

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    Remember last night when I was ignoring you? I was actually writing this. I'll make part II in a bit :smile:
     
  5. Piky

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    Really liking the where this story is going into, the atmosphere of it is really well done, it's very entertaining to read :3
     
  6. Blamo

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    Wow, very intriguing. The cliff hangers are real! Can't wait for part 2!

    Laurel has as much sass as you do ;D
     
  7. Aboves

    Aboves meh

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    Wow! This was amazing! This plot line so far is had to tell, but intriguing non the less. I can't wait to read the next part. Keep up the great work!
    If only there was a rating that gave 2 likes :3
     
  8. alleging

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    I wanna make something like this.
     
  9. Lord_Roke

    Lord_Roke Forever the Forums Watchdog
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    Nice story, but I recommend to change the name of the protagonist.

    Call her... Nyxy. :wink:
     
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