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Discussion in 'Literature' started by Piky, May 15, 2015.

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  1. Piky

    Piky Well-Known Member

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    A short story about one person (me) being alone in this world, the only survivor that is left on the Earth.
    Disclaimer; If you don't like sad feels, then don't read this as there is deep feels in this.


    "The year is 2067. I just turned 60 and it's my Birthday today, the only things I have left is my own body, destroyed clothes, my protected disc of Pikmin 2, and my own insanity. I've covered the Earth to find people, only the bodies of everyone I don't know, the ones I know, and the ones I love... Another year of pain going by. Maybe the 'Submerged Castle' is more pleasant then this.. Both ways of insanity, what pleasant paths."
    Written by, Kyle / 4-6-2067

    Kyle sighed and laid on his back, closing his eyes and re-opening them. Seeing a nothingness face and a robe, he knew who it was by the cold-dark feeling by his head. Death slightly bending down with his bony hands on his legs, he sighs and gets up a bit.
    "You are correct Kyle, it is your time to go. But before I take you, I want to talk with you."
    "Why did this happened?"
    "You human's are very pitiful and ignorant. Along with Greed and other general things."
    I closed my eyes, remembering what happened...

    2018, my 21th Birthday, I felt this ominousness chill running down my spine. I went to the nearest very protected Shelter. A week later, I heard the news saying something about a new element that is key to something, they kept it secret but I knew what it was...
    Seven days left... I started my walk to there and quickly set up my items I will need.
    Six days left... Getting needed items, like food and other uses for years of helping me to stay safely.
    Five days left... Setting up gas tanks for the food oven, surely getting them done.
    Four days left... Telling all my friends what's going to happen, even the U.S., they all denied everything.
    Three days left... I felt the chilling feeling coming back, I rushed to get everything I needed.
    Two days left... I heard the news talking about a Nuclear War that might come.
    One day left... I enjoyed the final sunset, told everyone that they needed to come into the shelter quickly, they didn't listen. No one listened. Only but a few friends tried that very day but couldn't do it.
    Last day... I looked through the telescopes that could view the mountain, I heard the news talking about a plane carrying 1 ton of Uytronium, all that added together was somewhere around ten to the eighteenth power, which also had enough radiation to kill every single person on Earth without having an extremely large amounts of lead shielding and other materials to protect you. The plane was going to deliver the bomb back as it could potentially kill off everyone. But there was a malfunction and the bomb dropped. The configuration inside the bomb was messed up and was told to detonate after it reached three miles into the air. The pilot told the Army base that it had a malfunction. Everyone had atleast around thirty seconds to live. The bomb was dropping extremely fast and reached the limit.
    All I saw next was a big could of fire and destruction. Then a huge sound blast, being knocked out for a day, I looked outside on the telescope. Everything was ablaze. All I saw was destruction.

    Years after it happened, I went to go see where my friends were at, all dead. I saw my the ones I loved, all dead. I carried my friends to the mountain I lived on, digging out holes and placing their bodies inside. With tears running down my face, I cried out asking "Why!".

    I realized that I needed to see my other friends from the other part of the world. Everyone I saw was dead. I looked for Karo. I saw her house and went for her.
    I went thousands of miles to see her. She was still surviving somehow but died within 24 hours of me coming to her. I was crying in tears wishing she was still alive. But it was impossible. I took her body brought it back to the mountain, making a grave for her. In the mountains, there was special graves for all my fallen friends. What it said on the tomb stone was "I lost this special person. May she rest in peace. With all my heart and love, you and all my other friends will always be inside my heart.."
    I walked the Earth again to find the rest of my friends and bring them to their resting places.

    Death knew what happened and had sympathy for me.
    "I'm sorry, Kyle..
    You should've died 60 years ago from all the radiation that was struck to you."
    "Why did you let me live?" I asked while sobbing.
    "To see how long you could last. I let you live until this long. Now is the time to end it. Any last things you want to say and or do before it's done?"
    "All I want to see is everyone I know and love at their graves."
    I walk around the graves and looking at the tomb stones. Death made a special tomb stone for me and told me this was my final resting place.
    "All your precious things you've carried for so long are in here."
    He lays his hands on my shoulder, saying "I'm sorry Kyle. Rest now, as you shall meet up with everyone you know and love in your dreams."
    I lay onto of my bed, falling asleep as Death sighs and I am now gone... The human race is all gone.
    I wake up in my dream, seeing everyone I know and love, all of them were waiting for me and watched me for all these years. I've wandered the world for 60 years, only to find the path of depression, greed, power, and destruction... But it's all over.
    "Here lies Kyle, the last survivor of Earth. The Poetic Kyle that managed to survive. A badass he is.."
     
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  2. YepImRobbie

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  3. Piky

    Piky Well-Known Member

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    Tons of feels.
    Only person on Earth ever alive (me). Re-living past. Every else dying because of (new/fictional) element.
     
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    Jesus that's amazing
     
  5. MR_EVIL_OVERLORD

    MR_EVIL_OVERLORD Elite Legacy Legend | PRO | Genius Super Villain

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    My version.....inserted

    2018 the zombie plague is spreading. The authority's, CDC, and military are powerless.

    After running my own analysis, I come to the conclusion that nothing short of nuclear attacks would stop the spread of the zombie infection. In addition, I theorize that such an attack to contain the virus is eminent within the borders of the nuclear powered countries.. I throttle the pencil in my hand and know what I must do.

    My Evil Tech, armor, suits, and equipment may just be humanities last hope.

    I create my own hyperbaric life support chamber. My E-Bots are the perfect weapon to defend humanity. I program them to deliver life support chambers to fellow friends @Pikmin_Hunter, @Andoconda_ , @jkzoom, @Striker_Sly and about 600 other family, friends, and esteemed colleagues. My mind races as I contemplate the types of skills that I will need assistance with as I build society from the ground up. The calculations are mind blowing.

    I only hope they receive them in time. As the last of my E- Bots take off with life support chambers I dwell on the inevitable. Will I be the last human alive? Sure the E-Bots will defend my friends in their sleep but I ponder what percentages of survivors will actually use them.

    My mind quickly flashes to thoughts of the future. I set the timer to 60 years in the future. Based on my calculations, which are never wrong, and jump in. The chamber roars to life and a wave of purple lights wash over me.

    If only they had listened to me. While I can understand why they wouldn't after the Moon fiasco, my Skynet virus, and the fact that I held the world at bay 72 glorious times with my evil feats.

    I did my best to notify everyone. My fear of the unknown washes over me but I know what I must do.

    My mission save humanity....the most appropriate work for "The Super Villain." I chuckle to my self and contemplate the reality of my situation.

    Exhausted, I look across my lab for the last time as I fall fast asleep. My E-Bots move into defensive position, armed, and ready to defend me in my sleep. Their purple strobe lights flicker as they move into sleep status.
     
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    First off, I would like to say that this was well thought out.
    • The story had many good transitions that connected both the past and present in a well manner (especially the flashback).
    • Great use of detail to explain everything, such as why Kyle was the only survivor left.
    • Superb use of dialogue. I would say that definitely enhanced the story by appealing to the emotions of the reader.
    • The log entry at the beginning was a nice touch. I liked how it gave insight to the thoughts and mind of Kyle.
    There was two parts in the story that I felt weren't explained well enough.
    • Why did Death pick Kyle of all people? Obviously Death has to go around monitoring billions of people. What was so special about Kyle that made him stand out and have Death decide to test Kyle's inner limits?
    • Why did Kyle decide to scour the aftermath of the bomb dropping so late (a few years later), instead of immediately after the explosion died down?
    Here's one piece of advice I would give for this particular story. Add on to a scene near the story's end. Kyle should see his own grave in his dream. The gravestone should include the quote, "Here lies Kyle, Earth's last survivor. May he find happiness beyond this desolated landscape." Your quote sounded too bias and unprofessional, so I figured this quote would tie into the story better.
     
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  8. Piky

    Piky Well-Known Member

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    Death choose Kyle (me) as I was the only one who had common sense and knew what was going to happen. I was knocked out, however... Upon being knocked out, I actually had died, but I was still alive. Death wanted to see how long my insanity can last (in-between the 60 years, Death thought I would suicide to end it all and get it over with). When I looked out after I was "knocked out", seeing all the fire and whatnot, there was so much fire and destruction that it was nearly impossible to get outside. Even after a year, you gotta think about the small things that I didn't mention.
    Think about the "Uytronium", when that explosion happened, there was so much radiation that happened, if I took one step outside, I would've died of radiation exposure in minutes, to hours, to months.
    After the 3 years, most of the radiation died out. (Logic of this element :stuck_out_tongue:)
    Anyways, I wasn't going for professional and my story seems "rushed" or whatever reason but thanks :stuck_out_tongue:
     
  9. MR_EVIL_OVERLORD

    MR_EVIL_OVERLORD Elite Legacy Legend | PRO | Genius Super Villain

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    I liked your story @Pikmin_Hunter ...it just needed a little sexy spice, a sprinkle of mayhem, and a pinch of Evil to make it a raw thriller us against the world type of story where the anti-hero's win while the goody two shoe superhero's die and the only thing between apocolypse and salvation of the human race is a rag tag group of friends...and a reformed Super Villain with high tech weapons and an attitude. :open_mouth:

    Cue's Evil soundtrack....

     
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